Erotic bed scenes in the description. Descriptions of sex scenes in women's novels

Ok, if all this is bad, then what is good?

In fact, there are no universal criteria for the “goodness” of a sex scene. If it lacks the negative elements listed in the first part, it should no longer cause disgust or laughter. However, it is still a long way from an ordinary, undistinguished scene to decoration. This is where the “give the reader something else” factor comes into play.

"Anything else"

It’s difficult for me personally to describe this phenomenon. Maybe this is perceived at the level of personal feelings, but I will try to formulate my thought. A good sex scene is filled with feelings. Not just sensations, impressions, or filled with nothing, like a police report, but feelings. She must make sense. That is, if you are marrying your gorgeous love line such a scene, or at least introduce it like a climax, it should change heroes.

For example. A girl can feel different - more mature, more sensual (everything was wrong before - but now she knew what real pleasure was), bolder, more crazy (now she is knee-deep in the sea, she has achieved what she wanted), more detached and calmer ( she realized that he could never love her, so at least let him sleep with her). The guy can understand what it is real love(and before that there was only pure sex), or real woman(and before that there were only girls), or real art (for example, if they suddenly fall into tantra), or real beauty(well, he hasn’t seen naked women in person, what should he do...), etc. In general, the scene should open new horizons for the characters, and your job is to show this beautifully to the reader.

The idea is not new. But usually, even cool authors who do not forget to introduce conflicts into every dialogue, every scene, carefully monitoring the growth of the character, forget to do this in the sex scene. Of course, you can describe sex well without this. But, as they said, this is terry IMHO, and to me personally it “tastes better” this way. Now let's move on to specific suggestions for improving your art.

Epithets, metaphors, comparisons - this is our motto

1. Compare. In my opinion, this has never ruined a single scene. She will immediately become juicy and beautiful. Compare movements and actions, flexibility, smoothness of lines, passion, ardor, etc. This is especially true for women. It’s just advisable to avoid cliches like “passionate like a tigress”, “flexible like a cat”, “strong like a lion”, “cold like ice”, well, I think you yourself know which comparisons are best to use))

2. Metaphysicize what is difficult to say in plain text. Oh, this is my favorite point. Probably should have taken it out separately. Anyway. In general, if you are embarrassed about something or don’t want to seem vulgar, describe it with a metaphor. In my opinion, it is not permissible to use specific words and expressions in general, unless you have tough masculine prose, where it is necessary, so that all this slobbering romance does not get out of the general context. Saying “orgasm” is very easy. But it’s difficult to show this feeling through a hero. Show the fall into the abyss, flashes, lightning, thunder, sparks, darkness, light, peace, satiety, fullness (or whatever you feel there, Idk). Show it with a feeling. The reader will understand what you mean, even if you don’t say like Captain Obvious, “Vasya Pupkin has never had such an orgasm.” The same goes for other elements.

3. Sing praises to the sexiest parts of your body. Yep, it's not just the parts you're thinking of. There are hundreds of ratings on the Internet - both from Man’s Health, and simply, and surveys on various portals, etc. If you don't rely on sociology and men's/women's magazines, sing the praises of what specifically appeals to you. Beautiful hands- OK. Chest and pumped up abs - excellent. Pink buttocks (XDDD), smooth beautiful line backs, strong broad shoulders, satin skin, rounded knees, slender hips, Long neck in the end... Think and describe it beautifully. And don’t forget - we metaphysicize, compare, so that the reader’s mouth waters. By the way, it should be noted here that the author is often outraged by the inattention of writers to female breast. No, you come up with something beautiful and original, not “swollen nipples” TM! In general, it seems that these same “swollen nipples” are the only indicator of arousal in a woman! Yes, it can manifest itself in different ways! Blush on the cheeks, perspiration, sparkle in the eyes, trembling, etc., etc.. “Swollen nipples,” damn it!.. Sorry. So what am I talking about? In a sex scene, you can show the appearance of the characters in all their glory. Just do it!

4. The smells, sounds, taste and touch of the characters are your friends. Give the reader 3D. This is so fashionable right now) The reader should see a three-dimensional picture in the bed scene, for greater identification, this is especially important. What does the skin feel like? What does she smell like? What does hair smell like? What do your lips taste like or what? What are the tactile, taste, sound parameters of the present moment? Immerse the reader. The description of tactile and taste sensations is often much more important than the physiological component itself.

Don't you watch erotic films yet? Then we go to you!

Yes Yes. And light porn is also possible, if you really want to write something bright and original, but don’t know what to come up with, or personal experience lacks. In general, the most universal way to learn how to write sex scenes without redness of the skin, trembling hands and a hail of cold sweat at the collar is the good old descriptive essay. Take the film. Look at the picture. And you describe it beautifully words. Yeah, it’s much easier to do this with a visual image in front of your eyes. Do you see where the hero put his hand? How did he trace along the heroine’s body? How did he throw his head back? How did the heroine hold her breath and her eyes open wider? WRITE! One, two, three scenes - and everything is fine.

You can also write stories where a beautiful, detailed sex scene is actually an end in itself. The author did this regularly. And now I wrote all this with a slight grin, although once, while describing the kiss, I almost hid under the table in shame.

Good luck and great works!

To be honest, the best sex scenes were, and probably will be, written exclusively by the fairer sex. Who, if not sensual natures, can subtly notice all the facets of the experiences of the main characters? Who can squeeze out of seemingly simple words what makes tears well up, or squeeze out an amazed smile? Exciting, or disgusting to grimace. Well, of course, girls, only you, and no one else. That's probably all I wanted to say...

Kidding. Didn't say everything... If we're talking about about a single sex scene, in most cases, with a little practice, there cannot be any clues. Each author individually visualizes his picture, and then either finds his reader or not. But what if you are not writing small erotic sketches? This is where everything is much more interesting and complicated...

Men see images and fantasies schematically, sometimes visually, in pictures, imagining different scenes of future creation. It’s like watching a silent movie with subtitles, something like: Ja-ja... Das ist fantastisch. We are driven by the desire to express our imagination more vividly, but quickly getting down to business, we fade away just as quickly, often unable to fully express our writing potential. Girls are much more diligent than us in terms of expressing their erotic thoughts. We should also not forget that creative process It's not a matter of minutes. Of course, more often than not, the original thought comes first, or special moment, which then grows storyline. But the vision of the picture itself is female-male, radically different. You, like us, also initially see an individual person, or a certain situation that you want to express in words, and then develop your plot, trying to imagine what was written in its entirety, or at least its ending, with dialogues, perhaps even with voice acting. But your eyes are different, and your picture is also not the same as ours. Women see in images, and the most important thing in them is their internal sensations. What was the weather like? What dress or costume are the characters wearing? How strong is the tan, what color are the eyes, how thick is the stubble??? And not only small details are important, but also the tone of the story. Dear young ladies adore undertones and shades, endearing or diminutive adverbs, as opposed to the more stingy but practical description by us men. All these are not strong, or weak sides our distinct worldviews, but only undeniable differences. We see the world differently, which means we describe it the same way...

Now my advice regarding ideal sex scenes through the eyes of a man. Yes, we are pigs. Ruthless, brutal males who adore themselves and sex. And most often, sex comes first. We love harems, where we are the center of the female universe, although we can also dream of that one and incomparable one. We like to take girls by force, breaking your modesty, forcing you to reveal the nature of a real sex slave, or at least an ordinary wet pervert. So that at the end of the scene, you yourself beg to be thoroughly fried. Although sometimes we fall for hard-to-get people, whom we are ready to conquer with our perseverance and imagination, in the desire to achieve your favor. We are different, and we love to read different things. But most importantly, we can be turned on not by the sexual act itself. Here, as you understand, all the words were invented a long time ago and written down, up and down. Men can, and even need to be turned on with a syllable. Most often, simple hints, reflections of the characters and the plot, are either exciting or not. That's why best advice, which you can hear to achieve more high altitudes in describing erotica, be yourself. They are frank to the last drop, improving their style every time. Experiment, and more often surrender to the power of your own fantasies, listening to your second self. Write for the most important critic of your life, for yourself, not forgetting to get high from the process itself...

Describe bed scene, of course, it’s not easy, and to some extent even risky. After all, if readers don’t like something about your "masterpiece", they will remind you, and more than once. There are two options here, either the sex scene may be well described, or, on the contrary, it may be very bad. Unfortunately, there is no third option here.

Let's close our eyes and imagine this situation: You are diligently going about your business, let it be reading interesting book, watching another movie, just listening to music, and other similar little things of interest, and then someone starts to bother you. I think that your emotions here are understandable. After all, you are being distracted, and this is unpleasant. But do you feel the touch of loved ones in this? No, you don’t even think about it, you just understand that they are trying to tear you away from your favorite activity. If you think about it, can you remember that your father’s hands were cold, since he had just recently come from the street, or the warm hands of your grandmother? Most likely not, because the touch of relatives is considered neutral in most cases.

But if you imagine that in the same situation a loved one touched you. How will you feel? Most likely, goosebumps run through your body, butterflies in your stomach, and a feeling of joy arises. Otherwise, we react differently than from the touch of relatives.

Another situation. If you are touched by a person whom you hate with all your heart. This could be a member of your family or just an acquaintance. Agree, you will involuntarily try to avoid this touch.

This is where the key to success lies. After all, the reader sits down to read such a story in order to plunge into the atmosphere, to feel all the emotions that this or that character experiences. Therefore, the more detailed the emotions and feelings of the characters are conveyed, the more delight the reader will experience.

We should not forget about the failures when, guided by manuals and having well described the sequence of actions required for a sex scene (undress, lie on the bed, spread your legs, etc.), the author forgets about the characters of his characters. From here we get a whole piece of torn text from a work in which readers previously worried about emotions, characters, where they were happy happy moments, cried over the character's death. And then, instead of something “sweet,” they get bad taste.

Therefore, let's look at what we should remember when describing such scenes.

1. We remember the feelings, emotions, tastes of each character.

a) Relationship to another character. After all, you must admit that the same touch can bring both a wave of bliss and cause even more hostility (all this, of course, depends on who touched the hero, be it a loved one, an evil old woman or a playful kitten).

b) The mood of the hero. If a character is tired, then he has no time for such entertainment, he just dreams of lying down in his bed. soft bed and fall into deep sleep.

c) Tastes, character. This will certainly leave a mark on the character’s behavior in bed.

d) Problems. If your character has someone seriously ill/died, or some great responsibility has fallen on his shoulders, then your hero will be concerned with solving these problems, and not with love pleasures, from which he is unlikely to receive satisfaction.

Therefore, there is no need to rush to describe a tender and delightful sex scene after the family of this character, let’s say, is dying or even died. Bad emotions will not disappear from the hero’s head so quickly. The maximum that your character can try to do is try to at least forget/get distracted for a while, and find support in a loved one.

2. Time.

Time- important point when describing sex scenes.

Here sex scenes work for the plot. If the characters decide to make love in front of the readers, then they should have a reason good reason. And this reason is a plot necessity. If there was sex, but nothing changed later, then this scene can be safely deleted. If you nevertheless found the very reason why the heroes decided to be satisfied with love pleasures, then we will move on to other options from which we will build. There are two of them:

a) There is enough time, there is no need to rush. The action can be developed in the following way, gradually: long foreplay, massage with all sorts of different oils, role-playing games, conversations, careful preparation: some special lubricants that will increase the sensitivity of the character, sex toys that turn sexual intercourse almost into a ritual, which will help the partner to relax more, to feel needed and attention to himself.

b) There is little time, you should hurry. Perhaps relatives will return soon, or the character(s) are in a hurry somewhere, or your characters are making love in a crowded place where they can be found at any second, then they have at most five minutes to caress each other. Long and detailed description In this case, the sex scene, I consider inappropriate. It may cause at least misunderstanding in the reader.

3. Be careful, don’t overdo it.

Leisurely seduction can be more effective than sexual intercourse itself. It could be a glance, a casual touch. Worth focusing on small details, it will make a great impression on the reader.

4. Don't forget about consistency.

If the relationship between heroes and were there before described in detailed detail, then the sexual act itself should be no different. If you haven’t spoiled your readers with a luxurious narrative, then you shouldn’t start.

5. Of course, the atmosphere, where would it be without it?

Atmosphere- however, this is a rather complex thing that even experienced authors may find difficult.

The atmosphere is influenced by everything: the place itself, its lighting, the mood of the characters and even the readers themselves. It can change back and forth and several times. There are several schemes for mood changes in a sex scene:

a) Gradual/increasing. In most cases, authors choose this one. Why? Agree, it’s convenient to describe all emotions and feelings gradually, from kissing to hard sex.

b) Fickle. It usually appears when the characters are in a quarrel or sorting things out among themselves, which in the process leads to a short but passionate sexual intercourse.

c) Violent. When one of the characters “pounces” on the other in order to satisfy his need, and the other resists, pushes the rapist away.

In conclusion, I want to say, believe in yourself, and you will definitely succeed!

The guy looked away from the sweet and long-awaited kiss. Taking the keys out of his hands, he brought one of them to the keyhole, but the door did not open. - Damn!

Mi Suri grinned lightly, noticing how the poor teacher's hands were shaking. His desire and irresistibility in time were visible. - Wait. I can't do that. Let's leave everything for later. Please understand me. You can’t. We cannot develop our already fragile relations so quickly. Ki Hong, just understand and don’t interfere. - The girl sadly lowered her gaze and closed her honey eyes. (Well, those are the lenses) She didn’t want to be alone and leave the guy alone, but there was no other way. “Maybe it’s worth staying? Or...” Mi took the psychologist’s hand in hers and brought it to her lips, lightly touching the guy’s gentle fingers. "I love. Only you. But why can’t I tell you this? Such simple words and it's so hard to pronounce them. I hope....you understand this from without explanation" Eli, grinning noticeably, she moved a little closer to young man, but immediately pulled away. "Stop. Stop me. Ki Hong, please stop." Mi continued to repeat the same phrase to herself, without having an explanation even for herself. Without showing your feelings and without meeting your gaze with the eyes of your loved one. “Heart. How stupid you are now and can’t make a decision.”

And suddenly he realized that he could lose his happiness if he did anything wrong. One had only to look into her eyes - and everything became clear... No, this time he will strangle his crazy emotions, put his pride on his throat - just not to lose his Mi Suri. That is why he unquestioningly fulfilled all her requests. Gratefully squeezing her fragile fingers, he put the keys in the pocket, having already opened the door, he took a step back. “No, I have to. I have to for her sake... Forget about yourself!”
“Of course, Mi, you can do whatever you want,” he sadly lowered his eyes, “But know that I always think about you and worry.” Always. - Leaning slightly, Lee weightlessly kissed the girl on the top of her head, enthusiastically inhaling the aroma of her hair and perfume.

Thank you. It is very important for me to know that you are nearby.... - “You still don’t understand anything.” The girl grinned lightly. “Ki Hong...kiss me,” she shyly looked away and then continued, “...if-, it’s not difficult for you.” Mi ate noticeably glanced at the guy from under her bangs. She stepped back and leaned her elbows on the wall. "You're not going to refuse my request, are you?" The girl reached out her hand and took the guy by the jacket, gradually pulling him towards her. “No. I know that Ki will not harm me and will never dare to touch me if I don’t want it. But then why am I so afraid to feel him in me again? Yes and I don’t really want to stay at home. I just want to cuddle up to you, just talk, stay up all night, and then meet a new day together....damn....somehow I’ve become completely sentimental.But I can’t now I don't want to leave him and I don't want to be alone."

Now she won't be his anymore best friend. He will be Lisa's husband.

You must be tired from the road, Travis. Why don't you take a walk?

The twins, returning from school, actually took over Amy. They dragged her to swim in the pool, where Amy amazed everyone: it turned out that the girl swims like a fish. Eighteen months of living in the desert had obviously taught her some survival skills.

Ben wanted her. By all means known to him. And they will come up with a few more ways themselves.

Amy could have sworn that he could see the hardening tips of her breasts through the thin fabric of her swimsuit and, moreover, felt the spasms deep inside her, in hot and dark places that she herself barely knew existed.

Bringing her head to his chest, Cole hugged her. He smelled like a man. He began to kiss her. And there was a lot of kissing - all over her!

There was no hesitation in his kisses. He knew exactly how to find her lips.

Only a fool could believe that he kissed her thanks to her lips!

The man's fingers stroked her bare skin. Amy grabbed his wrist and pulled his hand away.

“There would be no greater pleasure for me than to be the first in you,” he whispered in her ear, and goosebumps danced all over Amy’s body.

She cried out softly as their bodies came close enough to touch.

Cole stretched out his entire body on top of her, covering her completely and even more.

He squeezed her breast with his palm - he experienced the highest male pleasure.

He placed his hand on her stomach, feeling the shocks and ripples.

Her flesh disappeared into his body. He stubbornly slid his tongue over her lips, repeating their shape.

Amy moved on to examine the pulsating bundle of muscle between his legs.

The smile on her lips grew wider with every second of orgasm approaching.

“I’m not a fool anymore, I’m learning quickly...” she said, taking a sitting position.

And her smile showed that she had left this world and gone to heaven with happiness.

His tongue, rushing into her mouth, frantically did what the other part of his body was striving for.

Nervous shivers crawled up my spine. She turned into one huge goosebump and said, “Yes!”

Selina moaned, no longer straining her brain.

She wanted to die, but instead she fell asleep.

Grace felt her nipples become erect. It was new step in their relationship.

Something was always boiling in his brilliant brain.

“What does she want? Just sex, or something deeper?

Without turning around, he looked back.

Desire shook him to his very heels.

Chase grabbed her hand. Something warm flowed between them.

Inside her, the previously sleeping woman woke up and opened her eyes.

“And that tanned skin of his! And this body is in smooth layersnahbiceps, triceps and other male muscles!

A sexy smile pulled his cheeks towards his ears.

He took her face in his hands and, kissing her, lowered her onto the carpet in front of the fireplace.

Tears streamed down her cheeks, and her eyes burned with anger. Laura resolutely shook them off her face.

Jake knelt down, pulling her jeans off and giving her a view of the bay.

He began to climb the stairs, pressing his lips to her.